Please correct my grammar?

Introducing Argentinean supermodel, Julie Ordon. This gorgeous baby-faced, became a familiar face to Victoria's Secret catalog readers early in the 21st century. She has appeared in ads for L'Oreal, DeBeers and many other products, especially in Europe. Here are some hot pics and video!

Please correct my grammar?
Introducing Argentinean supermodel, Julie Ordon. This gorgeous beauty, became a familiar face to Victoria's Secret catalog readers early in the 21st century. She has appeared in ads for L'Oreal, DeBeers and many other products, especially in Europe. Here are some hot pics and video!





Note: using baby-faced and familiar face in the same sentence does not ring rightly. It could also read:





Introducing Argentinean supermodel, Julie Ordon. This gorgeous baby-faced beauty, became familiar with Victoria's Secret catalog readers early in the 21st century. She has appeared in ads for L'Oreal, DeBeers and many other products, especially in Europe. Here are some hot pics and video!
Reply:Introducing the Argentinian supermodel, Julie Ordon. This gorgeous, baby-faced woman became a familiar face to Victoria's Secret catalogue readers early in the 21st century. She has appeared in ads for L'Oreal, DeBeers, and many other products; especially in Europe. Here are some hot pics and a video!





Note: the word catalogue has two spellings, so it all depends which one you want to use. 'Catalogue' is British English, while 'catalog' is American English.
Reply:Introducing Argentianian supermodel, Julie Ordon. This baby-faced beauty became a familiar face to Victorias Secret Catalog readers in the early 21st century. She has appeared in ads for L'Oreal, DeBeers and many other products, especially in Europe. Here are some hot pics and video!


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Most of it was fine, u just can't call her a baby-faced. You can say that she is baby-faced, but u can't can'y say she is a baby-faced.
Reply:You may want to change...





"This gorgeous baby-faced ANGEL became familiar to Vic's Secret catalog readers..."





Hope that helps...





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