What Do You Think About This Poem?

A thousand words are disguised with tears


For a life that is no longer here


The feeling of tomorrow isn’t there


A truth that is to hard to bear.


I longed to say I loved you


But the words were said to late.


And I ask myself now, was my love for you fate?


As I wander through the open world


I see the smiles of the people I knew


As I search for a familiar face


But I don’t see you,


I waited years to find the strength to let you go,


When I once had you.


And now that you’re no longer near


I must have you here.


But God Needed and Angel


He saw you suffer


He saw your tears.


He took you home far away from


All the pain


He took you home far away from


Vile rain.


You let go of the memories


The ones filled with love


You left all our memories,


For the heavens above.


But as I quest for answers and reasons


I look for your face,


There are no answers


Not one tiny trace.


Tomorrow is no guarantee


And it’s very hard for me to see


That you’re no longer here

What Do You Think About This Poem?
i think this is very touching and i can envision it as a song even....its one of those feeling poems more like prose...not every line needs to rhyme.. god speed and continue to pour your heart as you have in this poem...
Reply:unbelievable.


it was great and you might want to think about a book of poems or something. you have a gift
Reply:As poetry, it is a little difficult to read, the cadence gets a little bogged in spots, but it is an intense subject tat many have tried and few have had much success with. I could feel your anguish over the loss of a loved one, even when you knew he/she was going to leave befoehand. That's when the memories of the eyes, the voice, the way they moved all play on your mind to allow them to visit for a small bit and ease our pain, albeit temporary. Keep it up, and time and practice will make you a master.
Reply:it is VERY simply written isn't it?


try to be more adventurous with rhyme schemes and other devices


such as alliteration or assonance


other than that...it' s..fine


obviosuly written about a very personal expereince, so well done for sharing it.
Reply:Spectacular.


I been through the same kind of emotional trips before. Not the funniest thing in the world, I am proud that you would vent your emotions in such a poetic manner. Your poetry is very simple, and its meaning is hidden, but the emotion is there.


Keep writing.